|Jademz Wrote:I think the direction for the characters is starting to look less technical. The piece where ma3a is standing by, as Jade brought redundancy to her User during the last few chapters, seems to hurt the dynamics of the character(s).
I know having them together in writing is more difficult, so it works. But the characters have been somewhat disconnected, then don't seem to have a word between them, other than thier programming.
That may be all the less active characters need, in the mean time, rather than being divisive.
Interesting comment - yes, the story so far has neglected Ma3a, which is something I need to consider while writing future chapters. So far, she's about as attached to this story as she was in Tron 2.0 - ie, not a lot.
While she's not once of the core plot characters yet (her time is yet to come), she's still important, so I'll keep that feedback in mind as I write.
Jet's time with Mercury has yet to come also, although they had some brief time shortly after they found each other again, yet were pre-occupied with Jet's other mission at the time.
That mission is coming to a close with Chapter 14, which will bring Jet in line with the bigger mission of surviving with the impending failure of the EN511 although that plot thread is already apparent in previous chapters if you've been read between the lines.
Jade's character is evolving more now that Jet is accepting her as a friend while starting to realise what her motivations were in coming along in the first place.
Anyway, please keep providing feedback. Knowing how the chapters read while still putting them together is important - especially now that the story is well progressed.